Invisible

For the A-to-Z Blogging Challenge this year, I’m posting a 100 word piece of flash fiction every day. It might be a self-contained story, or a scene–whatever, it’ll be fiction, and it’ll be over in a flash! Today’s story is…

Invisible

I pour the last of the tea into Terry’s mug.

“Susan’s coming in an hour,” I say. “Won’t you stay to see her?”

He drains his mug and grips my hand.

“No,” he says. “She doesn’t understand.”

“But she’s our daughter!”

Terry just smiles and kisses my cheek. “Later, Corrine.”

And he’s gone.

And I’m alone with the flowers on the window sill, and the sympathy cards on the bedside table.

I’ve tried talking to Susan, but she says I’m imagining Terry. Grief, she calls it. But I’m never sad when he’s here, and he’s always here—just sometimes invisible.

Check back tomorrow for J…

cds

Colin D. Smith, writer of blogs and fiction of various sizes.

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23 Responses

  1. Beautiful and heartbreaking.

  2. Marlene says:

    First time here. So much in those few words. I’ll be checking out the earlier posts. Nicely done.
    Marlene at On Writing and Riding

  3. lauraclipson says:

    So touching, and heartbreaking.

  4. Cath Smith says:

    Awwwwwww – so sad – your ability to convey so much in so few words is really something! A newly made friend of mine is a teacher and is getting his kids to do this (stories in 100 words based on a short prompt) – I told him about your site 🙂

    • cds says:

      Thank you, Cath! Wow! I’m humbled. 🙂 I plan to compile all these A-to-Z posts into a single document at the end of the month for those that enjoyed them and want to keep them, pass them around, etc. I know some educators (especially here in the US) feel a little uncomfortable directing their students to sites like mine given all the religious content, so that document would help in that regard.

  5. I really like this. And it reminds me of a book I read recently but I don’t want to say the title and give something away…

    • cds says:

      Thanks, Melanie. Hmmm… you’ve got me intrigued about the book. I guess I’ll have to find all the books you mention on your WUW posts and read them all… 🙂

  6. Andrea @ Maybe It's Just Me says:

    Oh…I did not see that coming, and despite the sadness, enjoyed it.

  7. Kim Graff says:

    I love said stories, and you were able to pack so much into this one. Very well done 🙂

  8. Chuck Allen says:

    Coping can take so many forms. Excellent piece!

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